Comments for The Sound of One Hand Slapping http://aitaylor.wordpress.com Just as a target is not set up to be missed, so is nothing by nature wrong in this world. Tue, 01 Jul 2008 10:24:14 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Day Twenty-Two: The Human Epic by Roux http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/07/01/day-twenty-two-the-human-epic/#comment-30 Roux Tue, 01 Jul 2008 10:24:14 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=58#comment-30 I like the premise, but it doesn't read like a poem. Possibly the odd but oh-so-lovely combination of rap, stand-up and poetry that is called poetry-slam. I'm curious where you go with it. I like the premise, but it doesn’t read like a poem. Possibly the odd but oh-so-lovely combination of rap, stand-up and poetry that is called poetry-slam. I’m curious where you go with it.

]]> Comment on Day Twenty: Untitled by Roux http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/28/day-twenty-untitled/#comment-28 Roux Sun, 29 Jun 2008 22:05:22 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=52#comment-28 That reminds me a lot about the following poem, by Wendy Cope: Bloody men bloody men are like bloody buses you wait for about a year and as soon as one approaches your stop two or three others appear. you look at them flashing their indicators, offering you a ride. you’re trying to read the destinations, you haven’t much time to decide. if you make a mistake, there is no turning back. jump off, and you’ll stand there and gaze while the cars and the taxis and lorries go by and the minutes, the hours, the days. *** Anyway, good luck with the story. That reminds me a lot about the following poem, by Wendy Cope:

Bloody men

bloody men are like bloody buses
you wait for about a year
and as soon as one approaches your stop
two or three others appear.

you look at them flashing their indicators,
offering you a ride.
you’re trying to read the destinations,
you haven’t much time to decide.

if you make a mistake, there is no turning back.
jump off, and you’ll stand there and gaze
while the cars and the taxis and lorries go by
and the minutes, the hours, the days.

***

Anyway, good luck with the story.

]]> Comment on Day Seventeen: The Flea Circus by missed http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/24/day-seventeen-the-flea-circus/#comment-27 missed Thu, 26 Jun 2008 03:10:26 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=43#comment-27 Hey, it's Roux visiting my little corner of these terrifying woods! I figure the point of the excercise is to make writing a habit. Admittedly, poetry is a bit of a cop out, though I have noticed that as the contest continues it's coming easier and easier. Ideally, I'd like to return to all of them at some point, possibly in an enormous landslide of editing that paralyzes the board for days... kidding. Maybe. I'll probably end up dividing the ones I like from the ones I don't and only doing about half of them. Or maybe I'll end up being bloody minded and doing them all. Or maybe I'll be indecisive. Thanks for commenting, Roux. Hey, it’s Roux visiting my little corner of these terrifying woods!

I figure the point of the excercise is to make writing a habit. Admittedly, poetry is a bit of a cop out, though I have noticed that as the contest continues it’s coming easier and easier.

Ideally, I’d like to return to all of them at some point, possibly in an enormous landslide of editing that paralyzes the board for days… kidding. Maybe. I’ll probably end up dividing the ones I like from the ones I don’t and only doing about half of them.

Or maybe I’ll end up being bloody minded and doing them all. Or maybe I’ll be indecisive.

Thanks for commenting, Roux.

]]> Comment on Day Seventeen: The Flea Circus by Roux http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/24/day-seventeen-the-flea-circus/#comment-26 Roux Wed, 25 Jun 2008 22:57:05 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=43#comment-26 I hate you and your natural aptitude for poetry ;_; I don't really have a comment for this specific poem, but I am impressed that you've been cranking out so many original drafts for this challenge, how many are you expecting to return to work on? I know you've posted at least one over in locution. I hate you and your natural aptitude for poetry ;_;

I don’t really have a comment for this specific poem, but I am impressed that you’ve been cranking out so many original drafts for this challenge, how many are you expecting to return to work on? I know you’ve posted at least one over in locution.

]]> Comment on Day Thirteen: The Days Were Prettier Once by missed http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/20/day-thirteen-the-days-were-prettier-once/#comment-22 missed Sun, 22 Jun 2008 03:57:33 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=37#comment-22 Funnily enough, yes. Also, interestingly about this piece, I lifted a line directly from a song that for some reason stuck out to me on the radio, altered some words and built a poem around it. So in song-like mood I generated a poem from a song. No wonder it sounds lyrical, right? By the way, thanks for commenting. I do so love seeing these. I never know if it's good ettiquette to comment back on these or not. Funnily enough, yes.

Also, interestingly about this piece, I lifted a line directly from a song that for some reason stuck out to me on the radio, altered some words and built a poem around it. So in song-like mood I generated a poem from a song.

No wonder it sounds lyrical, right?

By the way, thanks for commenting. I do so love seeing these. I never know if it’s good ettiquette to comment back on these or not.

]]> Comment on Day Thirteen: The Days Were Prettier Once by meristele http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/20/day-thirteen-the-days-were-prettier-once/#comment-21 meristele Sat, 21 Jun 2008 16:22:01 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=37#comment-21 Yay for guitars! Really, I think your mind was already musically there. This one seems a lot more lyrical than your normal run. It's strange; when my subconscious applied the "this is a song" idea, different critiquing standards went into play. Do you do that too? Yay for guitars! Really, I think your mind was already musically there. This one seems a lot more lyrical than your normal run. It’s strange; when my subconscious applied the “this is a song” idea, different critiquing standards went into play. Do you do that too?

]]> Comment on Day Nine: Another Rough Poem by Fuchsia http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/15/day-nine-another-rough-poem/#comment-19 Fuchsia Thu, 19 Jun 2008 13:18:06 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=33#comment-19 "The ice looked so beautiful, as it plowed into our side, And the ship and all my things flowed in and out on the tide." I love those lines. And the last line... haunting. “The ice looked so beautiful, as it plowed into our side,
And the ship and all my things flowed in and out on the tide.”

I love those lines. And the last line… haunting.

]]> Comment on Day Seven: Golden Mind by meristele http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/14/day-seven-golden-mind/#comment-12 meristele Sat, 14 Jun 2008 13:36:24 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=31#comment-12 This one and day one are my favorites so far. There's something about them that grab me on a quick walk through and pull me in. I always enjoy your associations; they surprise me into smiles. And make me think of things in a different way. I wasn't expecting that for Day Seven, actually. The android concept has been explored on so many occasions. Asimov, movies galore- even Star Trek of all things. I'm interested to see what you do with it! ;) This one and day one are my favorites so far. There’s something about them that grab me on a quick walk through and pull me in. I always enjoy your associations; they surprise me into smiles. And make me think of things in a different way.

I wasn’t expecting that for Day Seven, actually. The android concept has been explored on so many occasions. Asimov, movies galore- even Star Trek of all things. I’m interested to see what you do with it! ;)

]]> Comment on Day Six: For the Love of Man by Phalmy http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/13/day-six-for-the-love-of-man/#comment-11 Phalmy Fri, 13 Jun 2008 21:34:59 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=27#comment-11 First thing I noticed: I love rhyming like you do it in the beginning (before/where, when/then etc.), in the middle of the line but rhythmically well-placed. Thank you for that. As always, words bend to your will. "Vengeful brow and delicate ears". In addition, I always like the word 'intoxicate' when it's used artfully. It's just so graphic. Basically, I like. First thing I noticed: I love rhyming like you do it in the beginning (before/where, when/then etc.), in the middle of the line but rhythmically well-placed. Thank you for that.

As always, words bend to your will. “Vengeful brow and delicate ears”. In addition, I always like the word ‘intoxicate’ when it’s used artfully. It’s just so graphic.

Basically, I like.

]]> Comment on Day 3: More Poetry by Fuchsia http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/2008/06/10/day-3-more-poetry/#comment-10 Fuchsia Thu, 12 Jun 2008 16:49:18 +0000 http://aitaylor.wordpress.com/?p=13#comment-10 I don't know, you two, I thought it was excellent. Missed's poetry always makes me envious because unlike me, he's found his voice. I enjoyed the simple beauty of the piece very, very much. Good work. I don’t know, you two, I thought it was excellent. Missed’s poetry always makes me envious because unlike me, he’s found his voice. I enjoyed the simple beauty of the piece very, very much. Good work.

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